Unicorn Aqua Marine

Name: Aqua Marine

Sex: Female

Age: Mare

Species: Unicorn

Pelt Color: Aqua

Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style: A swirly, slightly darker aqua then the rest of her for her mane, and a simple tail, same color as the mane.

Eye Color: Light Blue

Cutie Mark: Waves

Physique: Rather normal, for ponies.

Origin: She came from a small fishing village near the ocean. (Hoofington Outskirts)

Roleplay Type: FIM

Occupation: Selling sea-styled items.

Motivation: Making an honest living for her Ma and Pa back near the sea. She does this with shell necklaces, teaching Fillies and Colt's how to swim, as that seems to be an increasingly rare trait farther inland.

Likes: The Ocean, water, the color blue, swimming, her Parents.

Dislikes: Meanness, Poverty, and greed.

Character Summary: Around 20 years ago, a wave splashed, a rip of thunder roared, and a pony Blue as the sky was born. The villages doctor called her a healthy baby foal. and from the looks on her parents eyes that she could see, blurry as it was due to the leaky roof and rain, she knew he was right. as a young foal, she was toddling along when a wave splashed her. it knocked her down, completely soaked her, and left what seemed like an entire beaches worth of sand stuck to her. Needless to say, her parents were not too eager to start combing out the sand from her hair, but she had enjoyed every second of it. The roaring waves, the sandy beaches... It was just what she was made for. It was at this moment that her cutie mark appeared: Waves. She had to get more, she had to swim...! It was now that an entire fillyhood fiasco of trying to keep her out of the ocean started. Somewhere in the middle of that, her horn started to glow when she got near the water, a sign of her power. It turns out, that her power was an inclination towards the nearest shell, or opal, or strange shaped rock, with minor powers involving the telekinetic movement of water.

It ended when her parents both left the legal age to work; Leaving her to provide for them, as a nice flip. Finding little business in an area where shells and fancy rocks were easily accessible, she set up shop first in Canterlot, then in Manehattan. While there, she noted that many a pony were denied basic necessities by greedy, meaner rich ponies. During her stay there, she gave away more products then she sold; all to poor ponies, just trying to provide for there families. At this time set a deep seated hatred of meanness, poverty, and greed. She could not stand either three, with the middle being the worst. However, it cost her part of her reputation; There are some ponies out there that would fake poverty just for a free bit.

As her little traveling caravan moved from settlement to settlement, she found herself with a shortage of stock. She started frequent visits to the sea; Always keeping her eyes out for something that could be fashioned into a necklace, or a bracelet, or some such. Most of the time, she found shells. Sometimes, an opal inside a clam. And, if she had a really good spot and a really lucky day, she could find a sapphire, mined out naturally by erosion and washed to shore by the waves. These were her pride and joy; She rarely sold these, and only at high prices. Where others saw just a simple gemstone, a trinket for clothing, a snack for dragons, She saw an embodiment of the ocean itself. She has the largest one she's ever found, and the smoothest one, too, in an extremely safe place.

Recently, she has been getting rather sick of travelling so far inland. She wants to go back home, see her family. And most of all, she wants to swim in the ocean again. she wants to swim until she turns into a fish. She wants to swim so far into the ocean that her home town in the west would be a distant memory. But first, she must provide for her family.

Instead of using years, it would be better to use age descriptions such as young foal or foal (for her childhood), filly (for teen years) and mare (for anything that happens with her as an adult). Also I would like to hear how she decided that she wanted to/or got into selling what she sells and more about exactly what she sells. Also more about her personality; what is she like personality-wise? Outgoing, introverted, loud, quiet, etc?

She seems to love swimming based on her cutie mark, what are her ambitions in relation to that (or overall) and what does she hope for her future. Does she want to be a professional swimmer, or just likes the water? As you mentioned she helps others learn how to swim (could it be a second job, or something she just likes to do).

Maybe she likes to care for the beaches as well, keeping them pristine, watching them and finding little trinkets, shells, etc. to sell, and that can tie into his dislike of greed (and poverty).

Why, that kind of constructive criticism is exactly what ive been hoping for. Thank you, kind sir, and I shall begin to elaborate.

Only thing left I would change is "2 years later, she was toddling along when a wave splashed her", and say instead "when she was a foal (or young foal)", as we don't know how quickly or slowly ponies age or grow up, that is why we use imprecise terms like foal filly/colt and mare/stallion. Same with the 18 year mention, you could say her entire foal/fillyhood. Other than that I think this updated bio is great and ready to go.

Harp n a Darp, thats fixed now.

Harp 'N A Darp Indeed!

For Great Justice!

I love that song so much :heart:

Oh, and if I was to give an ineducated guess as to how long it takes for them to age, I would say about as long as a regular (Read: Real Life) Pony to age.

Oh, and if I was to give an ineducated guess as to how long it takes for them to age, I would say about as long as a regular (Read: Real Life) Pony to age.

I'd be inclined to agree, but I wouldn't be surprised if they grew up at the rate and lived the life span of a human either, perhaps one day the show will address this, but we are just playing it safe until then.

Eh, I agree there. Probably best to generalize on unknown stuff such as that!