JohnnyApple Posted October 22, 2011 Report Share Posted October 22, 2011 Name: Carver Sex: Male Age: Stallion Species: Earth Pony Pelt Color: Light Cream Mane/Tail/Markings Color & Style: Brown colored short mane and tail Eye Color : Brown Cutie Mark: A Caliper Physique: Average Origin: Manehattan Occupation: Sketching Buildings Motivation: The thing that motivates him the most is that he wants to help ponies in any way possible but he has a dream of designing homes for regular ponies like him or maybe even the best building in all of Equestria. Likes : Making sketches and being with friends Dislikes: Rude ponies and loneliness Character Summary: Carver was born in Manehattan to a family of middle class ponies. He is the only child of his parents who are very nice and kind ponies, they always help everyone no matter the situation.They both work on buildings his mother is an interior designer and his father is a builder.And like his parents he is nice and kind but also very shy but he is trying to come over it and he is dreaming of becoming an architect.His parents love him a lot but he wasn't spoiled they made him understand that nothing comes easy in life. Later he went to school and it was a real turning point in his life, he made a lot of friends and some enemies. While in school he found the most important thing for him, his cutie mark. He discovered it one day in art class while drawing his house. He drew it trying to get every detail and measurement correct. So when he was finished it was a spot on sketch of his house and his cutie mark appeared it was a caliper. After finishing school and saving up some money he recently bought himself an apartment and he's trying to fit in the neighborhood. Even though he hasn't applied for a full time job yet he works freelance as a builder/designer or anything else he can do as long as he gets paid or he does it for free for ponies who need it. Despite that he has a dream of designing buildings that everyone would like to live in and be proud of it. But he realises that he needs to be working for someone really big for it to come true. And one day he will make the first step to coming closer to his dream no matter what it takes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DantonDamnark Posted October 22, 2011 Report Share Posted October 22, 2011 I have an idea for his name considering he works with buildings, maybe Carver. Just a thought. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyApple Posted October 25, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 25, 2011 Thanks for the suggestion. I'm just at such a writers block right now because I'm sick but I will use the name. Thanks again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
flutterscotch Posted October 25, 2011 Report Share Posted October 25, 2011 He sounds like a mason. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyApple Posted October 27, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 27, 2011 Okey, I think I added everything I wanted. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SunsetSombra Posted October 28, 2011 Report Share Posted October 28, 2011 The thing that motivates him the most is that he wants to help ponies in any way possible but he has a dream of designing homes for regular ponies like him or maybe even the best building in all of Equestria.I think that this actually might fit the motivations section a lot more wholly than what's in there now - it certainly seems a little more informative! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyApple Posted October 28, 2011 Author Report Share Posted October 28, 2011 Thank you. I fixed it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
brianblackberry Posted October 31, 2011 Report Share Posted October 31, 2011 Well reading this over I feel we have a good base but the summary feels that it could use more to it. For example, why was he rejected or ignored by most in school, and what did he do to overcome this? What are his goals? Does he hope to do something specific with his life? Any plans to get to that point? Has he attempted to use his drafting specialty to get into the full time business of architectural design? I ask these because as I said, I feel you have a good foundation but what the summary is lacking is any sort of plot hooks to create RP stories around and explore the character. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RCTwilightSparkle Posted October 31, 2011 Report Share Posted October 31, 2011 Unfortunately, colts and fillies can't own land or work on their own. If this pony is a colt he is allowed to rent an apartment and work as an apprentice to an adult pony but he'll need a very good reason for it. You may want to consider changing his age to stallion unless his being a colt is critical to the character. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyApple Posted November 1, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2011 Ok, I fixed up the age but I think I need some time to fix up my summary since I'm still having writers block when it comes to his summary. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RCTwilightSparkle Posted November 1, 2011 Report Share Posted November 1, 2011 Ok, I fixed up the age but I think I need some time to fix up my summary since I'm still having writers block when it comes to his summary.That's fine but if your character isn't finished please switch his status from FINAL to WIP. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyApple Posted November 2, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 2, 2011 Alright changed it back to [WiP]. I'm sorry for not checking this thread in a while. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RCTwilightSparkle Posted November 3, 2011 Report Share Posted November 3, 2011 Np, could you please update your title to fit the new board standards?just go to the full editor on your first post and click the 'use first tag as prefix box' and then delete the bracketed text from your title ([earth pony] and [WIP]) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyApple Posted November 5, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2011 Ok, changed up the summary a bit. And you have to excuse my poor English it's not primary language and I learned it from watching cartoons, films and playing video games. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BlindJester Posted November 5, 2011 Report Share Posted November 5, 2011 Ok, changed up the summary a bit. And you have to excuse my poor English it's not primary language and I learned it from watching cartoons, films and playing video games.That is the most awesome thing I've read XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RCTwilightSparkle Posted November 15, 2011 Report Share Posted November 15, 2011 How is this application coming along?- RC Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JohnnyApple Posted November 15, 2011 Author Report Share Posted November 15, 2011 Well I'm sorry for being inactive, I thought I would have some ideas but I didn't and I wanted to make it [Final] on Friday but I kinda forgot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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